第一部分：12個(gè)句型

第二部分：100個(gè)好句子

1. It is important for everyone to learn English well in our rapidly developing world.

在這個(gè)迅速發(fā)展的世界里，對(duì)每個(gè)人來說，學(xué)好英語是非常重要的。

同樣句型包括：It is important/（necessary, difficult, convenient, possible）for sb. to do sth.

2. The harder you work at it, the more progress you will make.

你工作越努力，你取得的進(jìn)步就越大。

(1)The+比較級(jí)..., the+比較級(jí)...

(2)比較級(jí)+and+比較級(jí)（The world is getting smaller and smaller.）

3. If everyone makes a contribution to protecting the environment, the world will become much more beautiful.

如果每個(gè)人都為保護(hù)環(huán)境做出貢獻(xiàn)，世界會(huì)變得更加美好。

類似的句型還有：If necessary…, they can…

4. The best way to remember new words is to practice them everyday.

記憶新單詞最好的方法是每天操練這些單詞。

5. The atmosphere in my family is fantastic

我的家庭氣氛溫馨和睦。

6. The reason why people choose to live in the city is that the life is more convenient and colorful.

人們?yōu)槭裁催x擇生活在城市的原因是因?yàn)槌鞘械纳罡奖?、更多彩?

7. I had a great first impression of American people.

我對(duì)美國人民有了很好的第一印象。

8. We have lots of confidence in our ability to solve any problem.

我們對(duì)自己解決問題的能力有足夠的信心。

9. With the rapid development of modern technology, the Internet has become a necessary part of our daily life and work.

隨著現(xiàn)代科技的迅速發(fā)展，互聯(lián)網(wǎng)已經(jīng)成為生活和工作中必不可少的一部分。

10. You should read as many books as you possibly can.

大家應(yīng)該盡可能的多讀書。

11. China is becoming more and more prosperous because of the reform and “opening up” policy.

由于實(shí)施了改革開放政策，中國變得更加繁榮了。

12. We all need clean air to breathe; we all need clean water to drink; we all need green places to enjoy.

我們都需要呼吸清新的空氣，我們都需要飲用潔凈的水，我們都需要綠地來享受。

13. Let’s work together to make our world a better place.

讓我們一起努力把世界變得更加美好。

14. We should make full use of our time to do useful and productive things.

我們應(yīng)該充分利用好時(shí)間去做有用的、富有成效的事。

15. We should get into the good habit of using our time wisely.

我們應(yīng)該養(yǎng)成一個(gè)好習(xí)慣，明智地利用時(shí)間。

16. What I really want to know is whether he will go abroad next month?

我的確想知道的是，他是否會(huì)在下個(gè)月出國。

17. Television is harmful to developing minds.

電視不利于開發(fā)心智。

18. Children usually have far more potential than their parents had realized

孩子們都有很大的潛能，而父母卻沒有意識(shí)到這一點(diǎn)。

19. In the past 10 years, great changes have taken place in our school.

在過去的10年里，我們學(xué)校發(fā)生了巨大的變化。

20. People who spend more time with their families are usually healthier and happier.

那些花更多時(shí)間和家人在一起的人通常會(huì)更健康更幸福。

21. The job was hard, which made me so tired that I almost quit half way.

這份工作太辛苦，差點(diǎn)使我半途而廢。

(1)直接使用：so… that…

The job was hard, boring and seemed endless, which made me so tired that I almost quit half way.

這份工作太辛苦、太無聊，而且沒完沒了，這使我非常累，差點(diǎn)半途而廢。

(2)能夠增加句子層次的高級(jí)連詞還有：

(Not only …but also…)、(Because…)、(because of…)、(As long as…)、(so long as…)

22. The Red Star Television Factory, which produces TV sets of quality, was set up in the 1980’s.

生產(chǎn)高品質(zhì)電視的紅星電視機(jī)廠，始建于1980年。

23. The E-reading room, where we can send e-mails to all parts of the world, is open to both teachers and students.

我們可以向世界每個(gè)地方發(fā)電子郵件的電子閱覽室，對(duì)老師和同學(xué)都同樣開放。

24. I feel I will be fit for the job needed in your company.

我感覺我會(huì)是你們公司所需要的人。

25. The number of workers and engineers has risen(更高級(jí)詞匯：increased) to over 2000, and 80% of them are college graduates.

工人和工程師的數(shù)量已超過了2000人，而且他們有80%都是大學(xué)學(xué)歷。

26. There is an increasing tendency that students own their mobile phones on campus.

在校園內(nèi)，學(xué)生擁有手機(jī)的趨勢(shì)在不斷增長。

27. Now in the rural areas, there are many children out of school. I think one of reasons is that their families are too poor to afford their schooling.

現(xiàn)今，在農(nóng)村地區(qū)還有很多孩子失學(xué)。我認(rèn)為原因之一就是他們的家庭太貧困，而無法供應(yīng)他們上學(xué)。

28. People should pay more attention to the education of children because they will play a very significant /(important) part/(role) in the future of our country.

人們應(yīng)該增加對(duì)兒童教育的重視，因?yàn)樗麄儠?huì)在祖國的未來扮演重要的角色。

29. In 2008, you will see Beijing as beautiful as a garden, with cleaner water and clearer sky.

到2008年，我們會(huì)看到北京像花園一樣，有著更加清澈的河水和碧透的天空。

30. How nice to hear from you again.

能再次收到你的來信真是太好了。

31. Your early reply will be highly appreciated.

敬盼早日回復(fù)。

I’m looking forward to meeting you in no time.

我期待與你早日相見。

32. If you have any questions or requests, please let me know.

如果你有什么問題和請(qǐng)求只管跟我說。

33. No matter what you do in the future, English will always be important.

不管你將來做什么，英語都是最重要的。

34. Nothing is more important than to receive education.

沒有什么比接受教育更重要的事了。

35. There is no doubt that playing video game is going to be their biggest problem for students to affect study.

毫無疑問，玩電子游戲正在成為影響學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)的最大問題。

36. Obviously, it is high/(about) time that we took some effective measures to solve the problem.

顯然，早該采取一些積極的措施來解決問題。

寫作高手使用的高難度表達(dá)：

I suggest the department concerned taking some effective measures to improve the present situation.

我建議有關(guān)部門采取一些有效措施改善現(xiàn)狀。

37. Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.

自從他上高中，他一直很用功。

38. We should spare no effort to beautify our environment.

我們應(yīng)該不遺余力的美化我們的環(huán)境。

39. Smoking has a great influence on our health.

吸煙對(duì)我們的健康有很大的影響。

40. As a proverb says, /( As is well known to us,) storms make trees take deeper roots.

有句名言說道：風(fēng)暴使樹木深深扎根。

41. It is a great honor for me to introduce to you one of my very best friend, Liu Xiang.

很榮幸給你介紹我的一位好朋友，劉翔。

42. Coming from a family of English teachers, she always had a particular interest in English.

出于英語教師世家的她，對(duì)英語有著特別的興趣。

描寫人物性格的高級(jí)得分詞匯如下：

diligent勤奮的 energetic精力充沛的 humorous幽默的 attractive有吸引力的

modest謙虛的 optimistic樂觀的talkative健談的 enthusiastic熱情的

43. I have fully realized that English is essential to my future.

我充分認(rèn)識(shí)到英語對(duì)我的未來是多么的重要。

44. I suppose electronic dictionaries are convenient, but Iead to laziness!

我覺得電子字典很方便，但會(huì)使人們變懶。

45. In conclusion, the advantages of studying abroad outweigh its disadvantages.

總之，出國留學(xué)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)要大于它的缺點(diǎn)。

46. Now, I think it is really successful experience, and I totally understand what labor means.

現(xiàn)在，我想這真是一次成功的經(jīng)歷，并且我完全理解了勞動(dòng)的意義。

47. From this earthquake, I realized that the power of the mass is endless.

通過這次的地震，我認(rèn)識(shí)到了群眾的力量是無窮的。

高級(jí)名言諺語活學(xué)活用。

解釋：“群眾的力量是無窮的”這句名言是我們自己造的，極具威力，然后再安在毛主席的頭上，更顯力量。最后為了增加真實(shí)性加上時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)，使判卷老師誤以為真，根本不敢懷疑。于是，心想：“這個(gè)句子太棒了，我都沒聽說過！”

造句：In 1951 Chairman Mao said in Nan Jing that the power of the mass is endless.

48. If you have spare time to visit my hometown, I’d be more than happy to be your guide.

如果你有空閑時(shí)間我的家鄉(xiāng)做客，我會(huì)非常樂意做你的導(dǎo)游。

49. Nowadays, both teachers and parents worry a great deal about the student’s using the Internet.

如今，老師和家長都對(duì)學(xué)生上網(wǎng)現(xiàn)象極為擔(dān)心。

50. Views on the issue in question vary from person to person.

對(duì)于該問題的看法因人而異。

51. We are blessed with new opportunities and faced with new challenges.

我們被賦予新的機(jī)會(huì)和面臨著新的挑戰(zhàn)。

52. Thank you for your consideration.

感謝你的體諒。

53. I really appreciate what you’ve done for my family and me.

我衷心感謝你為我和我家人所做的一切。

We should be very grateful if you help our children with their English study.

如果你幫助我們小孩學(xué)英語，我們將感激不盡。

54. We will never forget the happy days we spent together.

我們永遠(yuǎn)都不會(huì)忘記在一起度過的日子。

55. Many people are becoming aware of the importance of exercising.

很多人開始意識(shí)到鍛煉的重要性了。

56. The talk will be given at the Lecture Hall on Oct.12th, starting at 3:30p.m.

報(bào)告將在10月12日3：30在報(bào)告廳舉行。

57. Students should know how to take advantage of their time.

學(xué)生應(yīng)該知道如何利用他們的時(shí)間。

58. I got sick and tired of doing the routine work day after day.

我厭倦了日復(fù)一日地做一些例行公事。

59. Conquering English is not different from conquering a great mountain; both of them require determination, courage, and perseverance.

征服英語不亞于征服一座高山，都需要決心，勇氣和毅力。

60. I’m disappointed in the performance of our team at the sports meeting.

我對(duì)我們隊(duì)在運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)上的表現(xiàn)感到失望。

61. I’m very satisfied with what we have achieved so far.

到目前為止，我對(duì)我們?nèi)〉玫某煽兒苁菨M意。

更多表示“決心”的高級(jí)句型：

I’m determined to…

I have made up my mind to complete the task.

62. The city is located on the banks of the Long River.

這個(gè)城市位于長江畔。

63. I’m very glad to have received the letter you sent me two weeks ago.

兩星期前收到了你的來信，我真是太高興了。

64. I’m writing to request more information about the day tour to London.

我寫信是為了了解更多去倫敦旅行的信息。

65. Recently, our class have had a heated discussion about whether it is necessary for middle school students to carry mobile phones to school.

最近，我們班展了開一場討論，是關(guān)于中學(xué)生是否有必要帶手機(jī)去上學(xué)。

66. I wonder if you could tell me more about the trip.

我不知道你是否方便多告訴我一些有關(guān)旅行的事。

67. It is certain that if there are fewer people driving, there will be less air pollution.

可以肯定，如果開車的人少一些，空氣污染就一定會(huì)減少。

68. I personally feel that teacher is the most important profession in the world.

我個(gè)人認(rèn)為教師是世界上最重要的職業(yè)。

69. We can’t imagine what the world is going to be without purified water.

我們無法想象沒有純凈的水，這個(gè)世界會(huì)變成生么樣子。

70. I was walking east along Park Road, when an elderly man came out of the park on the other side of the street.

當(dāng)我沿著公園路往東走的時(shí)候，有一個(gè)老人在街的另一邊從公園里走出來。

71. In the big city, there are more schools and hospitals are available for its people.

在大城市，有更多的學(xué)校和醫(yī)院供人們使用。

72. Some people think that we should read extensively.

有一些人認(rèn)為，我們應(yīng)該有選擇性地閱讀。

73.In my opinion, you should come back after you finish you studies abroad.

在我看來，你結(jié)束留學(xué)后應(yīng)該回國。

74. For another reason, I think it will be much more convenient for you to look after you parents as they are getting old.

另一個(gè)原因，我認(rèn)為你回國可以更方便地照顧你日漸年邁的父母。

75. Classes in our school usually finish at four in the afternoon.

我們學(xué)校通常下午四點(diǎn)下課。

76. I am so sorry that I won’t be able to attend tomorrow’s lecture on American history.

我很抱歉，明天我不能參加那場關(guān)于美國歷史的演講。

77. While 25 minutes is spent on sports, only 12 minutes goes into housework.

花在教育鍛煉上的時(shí)間是25分鐘，只有12分鐘的時(shí)間用來做家務(wù)。

78. Maybe you forgot you spent the money on something else yesterday afternoon.

你可能忘了昨天下午你花錢買了其他東西。

79. Good habits are the crosscut to success.

好習(xí)慣是成功的捷徑。

80. I was deeply moved by the young boy, because I know Lei Feng is still living in our hearts.

那個(gè)年輕的小男孩深深地感動(dòng)著我，因?yàn)槲蚁嘈爬卒h一直活在我們的心中。

81. Many new houses had been built and roads had been widened.

很多新的樓房建了起來，路也都拓寬了。

82. It is more than ten months since we last met.

從我們上次見面到現(xiàn)在已經(jīng)有十個(gè)多月了。

83. It’s very nice of you to help me with my lessons every day.

每天幫助我復(fù)習(xí)功課，你真是太好了。

84. Nothing can live without air and water.

沒有空氣和水，任何東西都不能生存。

85. I prefer to live in the country rather than live in the city.

我寧愿住在農(nóng)村，而不愿住在城市。

86. People must be stopped from throwing dirty things into the river.

應(yīng)阻止人們往河里扔臟東西。

87. Peter sets aside some money every month so that he can buy a new car.

彼得每月留出一點(diǎn)錢以便購買一輛新汽車。

88. Linda didn’t go to bed until midnight so that she could finish reading the book.

為了看完這本書，琳達(dá)直到午夜才睡。

89. Early to bed and early to rise does good to your health.

早睡早起有益于健康。

90. More and more people are aware that it is important to obey the traffic rules.

越來越多的人意識(shí)到遵守交通規(guī)則的重要性。

91. Mrs. Brown is an Australian woman teacher with fair hair and blue eyes, who has been to many places of China.

布朗女士是一個(gè)澳大利亞的老師，她有一頭金黃色的頭發(fā)和一雙藍(lán)色的眼睛，她去過中國的各個(gè)地方。

92. On Sunday, May 18, we will visit Beijing, which has a history of 400 years.

5月8日，星期天，我們將會(huì)參觀擁有400多年悠長歷史的北京。

93. I think students should balance well between work and study.

我認(rèn)為學(xué)生應(yīng)該平衡好工作和學(xué)習(xí)兩方面。

94. Friendship is one of the most precious emotions in our life.

在我們的生命中，友誼其中的一種非常珍貴的感情。

95. It goes without saying that we cannot be young forever. （適用于自編名言）

不言而喻，青春一去不復(fù)返。

96. Last but not least, it will definitely benefit the citizens.

最后而又很重要的一點(diǎn)，它必定給市民帶來福利。

97. With the increasingly rapid economic growth, more problems are brought to our attention.

隨著日益迅速的經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展，更多的問題受到我們的關(guān)注。

98. The preservation of forests has aroused people’s wide concern

保護(hù)森林引發(fā)人們的廣泛關(guān)注.

99. As far as I’m concerned, I am in favor of the opinion that…

就我而言,我贊同…的觀點(diǎn)

100. Both governments and ordinary citizens should join hands to make this world a better place to live in, not only for ourselves, but also for future generations.

不僅僅是為了我們，更是為了我們的后代，政府和普通市民應(yīng)該聯(lián)合起來，使這個(gè)世界變成更美好的家園。

第三部分：作文技法

很多同學(xué)留言說，英語作文總是得分不高，有時(shí)候?qū)懙揭话刖蜔o話可說了，別說寫幾句漂亮的長句了，寫夠“字?jǐn)?shù)”都覺得很痛苦。同學(xué)們莫著急，小百今天來幫你解除痛苦，只要用到這些秘訣，讓你英語作文輕輕松松拿高分。

分享以下四種辦法，可以幫助同學(xué)們有效展開文章，完成寫作任務(wù)。

追加成分，擴(kuò)展句子

在閱讀理解中遇到長句子時(shí)，我們要學(xué)會(huì)通過找句子主干，把長句子縮短；而在寫作文時(shí)，我們則要反其道而行，針對(duì)目標(biāo)句子，我們?cè)谝c(diǎn)基礎(chǔ)上適當(dāng)添加合乎邏輯的附加成分，如定語（從句）、狀語（從句）、非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)、獨(dú)立主格等成分，使表達(dá)更清晰，主題更突出。

例1 高考臨近，學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間變緊，任務(wù)加重，很多同學(xué)內(nèi)心壓力大，學(xué)習(xí)效率低下。請(qǐng)為即將舉行的班會(huì)寫一篇英語演講稿，談?wù)勀銓?duì)保持良好的精神狀態(tài)，高效而健康地進(jìn)行復(fù)習(xí)備考的建議。要點(diǎn)如下：堅(jiān)持鍛煉；合理計(jì)劃；注重飲食。

要點(diǎn)拓展如下：

1. 堅(jiān)持鍛煉

普通表達(dá)：We should keep on doing exercise.

高級(jí)表達(dá)：To keep up good spirits and prepare for the big day efficiently and healthily， we are advised to do regular workout， building up our bodies.

2. 合理計(jì)劃

普通表達(dá)：We should have proper study plan.

高級(jí)表達(dá)：Never hesitate to make an organized and proper schedule， which contributes much to the accomplishment of our academic assignments.

3. 注重飲食

普通表達(dá)：we should pay special attention to our diet as well.

高級(jí)表達(dá)：Certainly， keeping a balanced diet， we are bound to feel energetic and dynamic， which serves the most essential functions.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：在對(duì)所給要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行簡要分析之后，就應(yīng)考慮使用哪些詞語和句式，從而符合五檔作文所要求的“有高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句式”的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)。在以上三個(gè)要點(diǎn)的處理上，通過添加高級(jí)詞匯如efficiently and healthily， regular workout， organized and proper schedule， academic assignments， feel energetic and dynamic， essential以及分詞結(jié)構(gòu)、定語從句等成分，充分?jǐn)U充了句子，不僅篇幅更長，亮點(diǎn)也更多了。

補(bǔ)加語句，充實(shí)文章

根據(jù)作文的行文走向，適當(dāng)增加一些與主題相關(guān)的語句，或根據(jù)作文題目中提示的要點(diǎn)，恰如其分地衍生出一些句子，即能夠起到“前引后聯(lián)”的作用，又可以補(bǔ)充一些相關(guān)信息，幫助讀者理解所寫內(nèi)容。此外，還可以起到協(xié)調(diào)句式，避免單調(diào)的作用。

例2 假定你是李華，你的朋友湯姆得知中國學(xué)生數(shù)學(xué)成績總體優(yōu)于英國學(xué)生，所以他想知道中國數(shù)學(xué)教與學(xué)的情況，請(qǐng)你寫一封郵件回復(fù)他。要點(diǎn)如下：課堂學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間；作業(yè)量；課外學(xué)習(xí)等。

要點(diǎn)拓展如下：

1. 課堂學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間

A special Chinese high school student usually has seven math classes per week， and some schools even offer nine classes for math， in which teachers often address key points and most common problems they’ve found in students’ homework handed in recently.

2. 作業(yè)量

Due to teachers’ immediately feedback on their homework， the majority of the students are able to have a good command of their learning materials， even though the workload is quite huge.

3. 課外學(xué)習(xí)

Besides homework， some students also manage to spend extra time reviewing what they’ve learned in class and get their notes organized. The revision style varies， but there is a common belief among students that math is of great importance. As a result， they devote quantities of time to it.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：該作文題所給提示并不多。在完成該作文前，同學(xué)們要考慮以下幾個(gè)問題： 1. 課堂學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間是多還是少？每周有多少節(jié)課？2. 作業(yè)量是大還是?。棵刻煊卸嗌?？3. 課外學(xué)生都有哪些課外活動(dòng)來學(xué)習(xí)數(shù)學(xué)？

通過有針對(duì)性地對(duì)目標(biāo)進(jìn)行分析，我們要為自己的作文找到拓展的方向。

此外，我們還可以根據(jù)實(shí)際情況添加一兩句名言警句來點(diǎn)綴文章，使評(píng)分再上一個(gè)檔次。

例3 Were I three years younger than I am now， I would strongly recommend that I set more practical and specific goals. As an old saying goes， living without a clear and achievable aim is like sailing without a compass. Compared with many abstract objectives， practical ones can bring us more courage and confidence whenever we make one step forward.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：Living without a clear and achievable aim is like sailing without a compass. 這個(gè)句子盡管結(jié)構(gòu)并不復(fù)雜，屬于“主—系—表”結(jié)構(gòu)，但該句采用了類比這一修辭手法，將無目標(biāo)的生活比作無指南針的航海，頓時(shí)使人生目標(biāo)形象起來。

添加過渡，條理清晰

在寫作當(dāng)中，恰當(dāng)使用一些銜接手段，包括使用過渡詞和過渡句，可以使文章嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)、流暢、富有節(jié)奏。

例4 假定你是李華，你校攝影俱樂部（photography club）將舉辦國際中學(xué)攝影展。請(qǐng)給你的英國朋友Peter寫封信，請(qǐng)他提供作品。信的內(nèi)容包括：

1.主題：環(huán)境保護(hù)；

2.展覽時(shí)間；

3.投稿郵箱：intlphotoshow@gmschool.com。

注意：

1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Peter，

Our school photography club is going to hold an International High School student Photography Show. As far as I know， the theme of the show is environmental protection. Actually， I know you are gifted in taking good pictures and have always wanted to do something for environmental protection. I clearly remember you showed me some photos on that theme the last time you visited our school. In addition， it will start from June 15th and last three weeks and what makes us excited is that any student who is interested can participate in it. In a word， I firmly believe that this is surely a good chance for more people to see them. If you want to join， please send your photos to intlphotoshow@gm.school.com.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Yours，

Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng)：本篇范文很好地完成了要求，要點(diǎn)擴(kuò)充合情合理。全文句式多樣化，并沒有一直使用陳述句，而是穿插使用祈使句等多種句式，符合邀請(qǐng)函的特點(diǎn)。文章中使用了較多的復(fù)合句，如定語從句any student who is interested can participate in it，時(shí)間狀語從句... the last time you visited our school，條件狀語從句If you want to join ...等，體現(xiàn)出不錯(cuò)的駕馭英語的能力。

此外， 本文使用了as far as I know，in addition，in a word，等過渡短語，巧妙地將三個(gè)要點(diǎn)“主題、展覽時(shí)間、投稿郵箱”串聯(lián)起來，使閱卷老師對(duì)作者表述的意思一目了然，同時(shí)也增強(qiáng)了文章的條理。

我們寫作當(dāng)中經(jīng)常會(huì)用到的過渡語有：first of all， to begin/start with， in the first place， first and foremost， second（ly）， furthermore， moreover， what’s more， in addition， besides， but， however， on the contrary， nonetheless， in contrast/comparison， nevertheless， hence， therefore， in conclusion， to conclude， in a word， last but not least等。

重點(diǎn)突出，詳加描述

在對(duì)文章進(jìn)行展開時(shí)，除了可以采用前文提到的添加追加成分、過渡成分來拓展句子外，我們還可以根據(jù)題目提示，確定整篇文章的主要點(diǎn)和次要點(diǎn)，在主要點(diǎn)上著力發(fā)揮，次要點(diǎn)表述清楚即可，不用過多渲染。

例4 讀下面圖畫，按要求用英語寫一篇詞數(shù)為120左右的短文。

內(nèi)容包括：

描述畫面；

概述其含義；

談?wù)剛€(gè)人感想。

鑿壁偷光

注意：

1. 短文開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 短文中不能出現(xiàn)與本人相關(guān)的信息。

In the picture， we can see a boy in worn clothes，who was reading a book with full attention. He was sitting at a shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it and a weak ray of light came in through a small hole in the wall.

This is a well-known story from an ancient Chinese idiom. The boy， being poor， couldn’t afford even a candle， so he bored a hole in the wall to “steal” light from his neighbor’s house to read at night. The moral of the story is that we should spare no effort to acquire knowledge and never get discouraged easily no matter how difficult the situation may be.

Of course， things are totally different today. It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts. Hard work pays off. We should take pains to improve ourselves through learning and get prepared for the future.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：該篇習(xí)作語言豐富，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，過渡自然，尤其在內(nèi)容的安排和取舍上，處理得十分恰當(dāng)。本題的三個(gè)要點(diǎn)中，要點(diǎn)3是本文的重頭戲，體現(xiàn)了高考作文題的“思想性”，本文對(duì)此著重“潑墨”，所占篇幅幾乎為全文篇幅一半，要點(diǎn)2次之；針對(duì)要點(diǎn)1，本文對(duì)圖片僅需作簡要描述，一句話即可。

“不積小流，無以成江河；不積跬步，無以至千里”。要想寫出高質(zhì)量的考場作文，就需要“適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)”。而細(xì)節(jié)的增加需要從實(shí)際需要出發(fā)，結(jié)合作文的題材、體裁以及題中給出的要點(diǎn)，“畫龍點(diǎn)睛”式地添加，不要信口開河，更不能夠信馬由韁、亂加一氣，最終偏離主題，給閱卷老師留下“該寫的不寫，不該寫的寫得過多”的不良印象。

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